For this Winter Learning Journey I had to imagine I had never been to New Zealand before, and I was the first on the waka to arrive at Shag Point. I then had to write a poem on how I would feel when I have arrived. Here is my poem.
I was nervous as I walked towards the waka
At times wanted to jump off and swim back
We made it to land
I was stunned by the bright green grass and trees ahead of me
Hello Oh Hsen, I like how you have added some interesting words to make your story sound better. Maybe next time you should try and add in some rhymes. Keep on working hard.
ReplyDeleteHi Oh Hsen,
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem it sound interesting. I like that you showed feeling into your poem. Great Work!
Eric
Hi Oh Hsen
ReplyDeleteWhat a nice poem. I like you wrote 'At times I wanted to jump off and swim back'. Keep up the great work Oh Hsen.
Daniel
Hello Oh Hsen!
ReplyDeleteThis is a nice poem! I would probably want to swim away too, but there's no turning back! I'd love to know what happens next...
Nicky :)
Hi Oh Hsen
ReplyDeleteWhat a great poem to describe how the Maori felt when they first arrived at New Zealand! I would probably be frightened as well.